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Volume 13 is a no-brainer as it's problaby the single most important even in the series thus far.N3oShweaty wrote:also, what volumes (if you had to choose some of them not all) would you recommend i buy for collectors purposes
Below is the result of my reviewing volume 1. Volume 1 alone. Except Cross Fire, Hirano's handwriting and all of Anderson's line.
[page14]
"Vampires can only bleed more vampires by..."
-> "Draculs and Draculinas can only bleed more vampires by..."
「男吸血鬼（ドラクル）は処女を 女吸血鬼（ドラキュリーナ）は童ていの血液を吸ったときのみ...」
(Thess pointed this out on the Duane Johnson's resume topic. You can determine the meaning of these words from the context, right?)
[page35]
"I wanted to keep watching over and taking pride in the Hellsing blood that flows through you..."
-> "I wanted to keep watching over your noble spirit and blood handed down from the Hellsing family..."
「おまえに脈々と流れている ヘルシング家の血と誇り、もっとずっと見守っていてやりたかった・・・」
[page44]
"What were you thinking, father...?"
-> "You are a terrible person, father...."
「父上もひどい人だなあ・・・・・・」
(The former line works as an expression of her disappointment, but misses a comparative effect; She was facing a terrible reality/situation, running for her life from her own uncle)
[page59]
「先代はそう呼んでおられました」
"That's what your family has called me."
-> "That's what your father had called me."
("your family" is not accurate. "先代" means only the late head of the family, namely Arthur.
So there is a possibility Alucard had been called by other names before Arthur's time.)
[page69]
"If anyone catch them, we can!"
-> "I'm sure he'll catch up them very soon!"
「彼ならすぐ追いつく！」
(he = Alucard, them = the Bonnie and Clyde couple
Integra put emphasis on that 'Alucard' can do it.)
[page70]
"...and spacious walls, too.
They used these people's blood to write massages.
Blasphemous anti-Christian massages..."
-> "...and spacious walls to write messages on with their victims' blood
--- to hurl defiance at Christianity and Christians."
「...そして必ず広いカベがある家だ
くびり殺したその血でメッセージを残すための
キリスト教に キリスト教徒に挑戦するためのだ」
(It's understandable that they changed the modification relation. Still, the last phrase seems too rough.)
[page79]
"Die!"
->"殺(sha)"/"Kill you"
「殺(シャー)」
(Alucard spoke CHINESE. Unbelievable? But he did.)
(Though "殺" is a kanji commonly used in Japanese, it doesn't work as Japanese by itself. And "シャー" is its pronunciation in Chinese. So I think it's better to leave it as a foreign word and show the pronunciation in pin-yin.)
[page85]
"...No! Nooo!"
-> "Y...Ya!"
「･･･ヤッ ヤーッ」
[page87]
"It's nighttime but I saw her like it was high noon."
-> "It's nighttime but I saw her better than daytime."
「夜なのに昼よりよく見えた」
[page168]
"ばっ ばっ You freak of nature!"
-> "You... you... Monster!"
「ばっ ばっ 化物ッ！！」
(Stuttering "You monster!"... Why did they leave it raw?)
(Plus, I think they should always use the same word for 化物[monster] as possible. It has a particular meaning in Hellsing, as a contrast to 人間[human].)
[page180(Character Explanations)]
Alucard
"He was a lot of trouble. Vampire characters have been drawn like this for ages! Like Master Mosquiton or Nightwalkers! Geez! I mean, vampires like him have been alive for how many years? But yes! This happens to be a specialty of mine too!!"
-> "He was a lot of trouble. He overlapped with so many characters at that time! Like Master Mosquiton or Nightwalkers! Geez! Since it was kinda significant year as the anniversary of Dracula's birth! But yes! This happens to be a specialty of mine too!!"
「ヤバかったですよ。もういろいろ時期的にカブってましたよ！マスターモスキートンとかナイトウォーカーとか！もう！そりゃあ吸血鬼ドラキュラ生たん何周年かなワケで！ああハイ！ボクもまァそれのおカブの一ツでしたけど！」
(They have messed up Hirano's words...)
Police girl
"She looks like she is on the verge of death. Yeah. That's about it."
-> "She lacks individuality. Yeah. I know."/"She is fading into the background. Yeah. I hear you."
(I say this is a complete mistranslation.
"影が薄い" literally means "have a weak shadow". But it's not that she is shadowed by death. It means she has a weak personality.)
Another mistranslation.
[page194(CrossFire1)]
"Where're our targets?! Heinkel."
-> "Where's my weapon?! Heinkel."
「エモノはどこだ！！ハインケル」
(There's two homophones for "エモノ(emono)".
得物 - one's favorite weapon
獲物 - target
It makes no sense to adopt the latter when Yumie already see her targets.)
Fortunately or unfortunately, these mistakes/missing contexts don't have crucial affect on the plot -- but means a lot.
You might find it too nit-picky. I know some of mistakes could be understandable as a kind of free translation, but I just presented everything which I think is questionable. And, Sorry if the alternative/literal translations I suggest sound odd. I'm not competent enough to come up with a good wording. I believe that at least you can see what I wanted to point out, though.
